tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2319453613836766610.post6689480366336550967..comments2023-10-23T23:35:22.776+02:00Comments on Cross Words: Excerpt from The Immortality GameTed Crosshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09022309459554237650noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2319453613836766610.post-64410210828704614992012-05-24T17:28:02.245+02:002012-05-24T17:28:02.245+02:00I love the dialogue. You've made the accents o...I love the dialogue. You've made the accents of the speakers come through without even telling me that they had accents.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2319453613836766610.post-80404069913319141872012-05-22T04:14:12.282+02:002012-05-22T04:14:12.282+02:00Hey Ted,
This is really good. I like that there ...Hey Ted,<br /><br />This is really good. I like that there are funny moments interspersed with the exposition. The premise seems very interesting. My only suggestion would be to figure out how to put half of that exposition into description rather than dialogue. About 90% of this chapter is dialogue, and that's about 40% too much. I only know this because dialogue info-dump is one of my biggest vices too. :) Sara is always telling me to cut the talking.Nataliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861022355718378425noreply@blogger.com