tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2319453613836766610.post8833640879452044769..comments2023-10-23T23:35:22.776+02:00Comments on Cross Words: First ParagraphsTed Crosshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09022309459554237650noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2319453613836766610.post-22214716486108325632009-12-10T00:47:06.451+01:002009-12-10T00:47:06.451+01:00WOWEEEEEE! Ted, I'm very impressed! ENJOY! ---...WOWEEEEEE! Ted, I'm very impressed! ENJOY! --- Gary<br /><br />P.S. As all Soviet-borns think they're geniuses, here's my advice: 1. rephrase "... and I want to find out what it is” as it just doesn't roll off the tongue easily/doesn't read effortlessly ("find out what it is" has too many t's, or too many short syllables, perhaps); 2. "..., but there was no sign of elves" comes too abruptly. I suggest for emphasis and easier reading either starting a new sentence: "But there was no sign of elves." or possibly, simply "There was no sign of elves." <br /><br />P.S.S. Now you have a bestseller on your hands.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com