Okay, I am back from my vacation to London. It would have been truly memorable if I hadn't suffered terrible allergies that attacked my eyes quite painfully. We managed everything that we wanted to do, and even threw in the concert of Paul McCartney on Sunday evening.
Here's a quandary I am in, and perhaps some of you might have some sound advice. What do you do when readers consistently point out something that should normally be correct, but due to something you can't tell them it isn't? Here's what I mean.
Readers keep pointing out that at times my characters use modern sounding phrases when they speak. They assume that since my world appears medieval that this is wrong. However, the tribe that eventually became the Greatlanders evolved with the help of scientists from earth. Thus, the language they speak is Russian. It is not only modern, but it is even from the 22nd Century, so it is normal that they took these modern aspects of speech from the scientists who taught them much of what they know.
When I first imagined this book, I wanted the sole remaining scientist (the wizard Xax) to reveal where he was from in a series of scenes. However, once I began studying what it takes for a first time writer to get published I had to change my mind. First time writers can't write such a long book (it would have been closer to 200,000 words rather than the 130,000 it is now), plus agents prefer to see us stick to a single genre for our first effort. Because of this I set out to tell The Shard as a stand-alone fantasy with bare hints that there was something more to it.
This leaves me in the current pickle. Everyone, including agents, will think that the language is too modern in spots, while to me it is normal. I suppose I could attempt to detect where each of those problem spots are and change the language, but that is not simple to do, and it should be unnecessary.
Anyone else ever encounter this issue?